Ari desired more than what his life currently entailed. He wanted to live it to it’s fullest.
Ari was a simple man, but being simple wasn’t enough. One day, he saught his fortune from a local psychic, who in turned told him to travel to the mountains and honor the gods to find his destiny.
Ari prepared a large backpack and some humble meals for the long travel. He already was a religious man, so he had easily packed all his praying equipment.
So began Ari’s long journey up the mountainside. Every morning he would pray and meditate for 3 hours, he’d brought offerings, enough for every day he woke up in the mountains.
It was one morning when Ari was meditating when he heard an animal approaching. It was a boar, with anger in it’s eyes and an intent to kill. Ari looking longingly at the boar, it had been a while since he’d had a decent meal, and his offerings to the god during his morning rituals were diminishing. A boar would be a feed him and his praying for the days to come.
So Ari killed the boar, it didn’t take long as he strung his bow and struck it down. The boar filled his tummy and his desires to stay in the mountain more.
A few days had past, and Ari was meditating as always. He heard another rustling behind him, this time it wasn’t a boar. It was a god, a celestial being. Ari knew that this was his what the fortune teller had been speaking about.
The god was happy will his devotion and the offerings of the boar meat, a bigger share than what Ari had been eating himself. In his praise he gave Ari a magical weapon, and told him to go live and study dancing amongst the town at the base of the mountains, the bow would show it’s use to him there.
And so, Ari did.
Authors Note: I loved the story of Arjuna, so I decided to give it a twist and have the boar become food for him instead of a conflict between him and a god!
Indian Myth and Legend by Donald A. Mackenzie (1913).
Image source: Arjuna and the Celestial Beings
Ari was a simple man, but being simple wasn’t enough. One day, he saught his fortune from a local psychic, who in turned told him to travel to the mountains and honor the gods to find his destiny.
Ari prepared a large backpack and some humble meals for the long travel. He already was a religious man, so he had easily packed all his praying equipment.
So began Ari’s long journey up the mountainside. Every morning he would pray and meditate for 3 hours, he’d brought offerings, enough for every day he woke up in the mountains.
It was one morning when Ari was meditating when he heard an animal approaching. It was a boar, with anger in it’s eyes and an intent to kill. Ari looking longingly at the boar, it had been a while since he’d had a decent meal, and his offerings to the god during his morning rituals were diminishing. A boar would be a feed him and his praying for the days to come.
So Ari killed the boar, it didn’t take long as he strung his bow and struck it down. The boar filled his tummy and his desires to stay in the mountain more.
A few days had past, and Ari was meditating as always. He heard another rustling behind him, this time it wasn’t a boar. It was a god, a celestial being. Ari knew that this was his what the fortune teller had been speaking about.
The god was happy will his devotion and the offerings of the boar meat, a bigger share than what Ari had been eating himself. In his praise he gave Ari a magical weapon, and told him to go live and study dancing amongst the town at the base of the mountains, the bow would show it’s use to him there.
And so, Ari did.
Authors Note: I loved the story of Arjuna, so I decided to give it a twist and have the boar become food for him instead of a conflict between him and a god!
Indian Myth and Legend by Donald A. Mackenzie (1913).
Image source: Arjuna and the Celestial Beings
I love your fist sentence. It really draws the reader in because I feel like everyone is searching for how they can live life to the fullest. I also liked how you made the story your own by shortening Arjuna's name to Ari. It took me a little bit to catch on. I am also happy that the story ended well for Ari and that he found what he was looking for.
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ReplyDeleteI liked your recreation of the story because it was not nearly as intense as the original. There were a couple of grammatical errors I noticed while reading such as "forfune" in the first paragraph and Ari knew that this was his what the fortune in the sixth paragraph. Overall, I thought the story was a really nice twist to the original because it was much more light-hearted and much easier to follow.
Hey Callie,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your twist on the original story of Arjuna and the god on the mountain. I think by offering the food instead of fighting with the disguised god made for a much more pleasant and less confusing read in my opinion. I also liked how Ari was destined from the gods to study dance. I think the whole battle between Arjuna and Duryodhana could have and should have been a dance off instead. Great story and I can't wait to read more!
Hey Callie, the way you started your story was really dope. It gave me a sense of what Ari was like in a very succinct sense. The tone with which you retold this tale was very casual and chill, which I really liked. By the end of the story I felt like I had a solid sense of Ari. The layout of the story and the way you broke up the paragraphs was really pleasant and easy to read. I will say, at first I was unsure as to what story you were retelling but after reading your author's note and looking over the original text I could definitely see the connection.
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